Persuasive Essay/Researched Argument: Sample Essay, Annotated Bibliography, and Writer's and Instructor's Comments

 

PHETO TAU

 

Is Africa a Basket Case?

 

On October 7 1999, Arizona Daily Wildcat published a remarkable article by Lora Mackel, a history Junior in the University of Arizona. In the article, Mackel expressed her views about the current state of the African continent as follows:

 

We have all seen the images before: Children with bloated bellies, rebels with assault weaponry, shanty towns that spread as far as the camera can pan. These images reflect our own modern conceptions of Africa, for it seems that these wretched conditions and the continent itself are permanently linked. (4)

 

          Mackel’s article reminded this writer of a little anecdote told by a fellow countryman of mine named Kagiso, who is from northern Botswana and is currently studying in Alabama.  Apparently, one of his American classmates innocently asked him how he had escaped from the civil war going on in Africa. According to Kagiso, this particular classmate of his has this notion that Africa is just one big country. Although it was easy for my countryman, Kagiso, to dismiss his classmate’s question as emanating from an individual on the lower side of the I.Q. scale, the point is that it connects to Mackel’s views and summarizes the perceptions of some Americans about Africa. Their perception is that the whole African continent is a basket case. On the other hand, there are some Americans who – unlike some of their countryman – may not dismiss Africa entirely out of hand. Such Americans may hold the view that Africa is a serious cause for concern. Once in a while, a sympathetic soul who holds the latter view more strongly may arise. Unfortunately, most of the time, such people feel so sorry for Africa that they end up being apologists for the African continent, never mind the fact that the continent is home to 61 countries with varying economic successes (“Atlas” 122). The generalized descriptions of Africa by writers such as Mackel fail dismally to present a true image of the continent.

          Africa’s critics may single out the political instability prevalent in some African countries as a cause for their dismissal of Africa. These critics may use Rwanda to plead their case. In 1994, approximately 250,000 Rwandans crossed into neighboring Tanzania as refugees. This was after their village leaders forced them out just because they belonged to a different ethnic group (Shawcross 4). It is easy for Africa’s critics to gloat over these reports. However, one need not be reminded that political strife is not uncommon in this day and age. One other point is that political strife is not prone to happen in Africa only. Certainly some African countries have political instability problems, but so do some European countries. The war in Kosovo that lead to 200,000 ethnic Serbs (Albanians) being expelled from their own country of birth because their President, Slobodan Milosivich, wanted to cleanse the country of its Albanian population (“Kosovo” 18) comes to mind. Even some Asian countries have their own political problems. In Indonesia, ethnic and religious hatred are not uncommon (McCarthy 24). This evidence suggests that, contrary to popular belief, political instability is not just an African problem. It is a global problem.

One negative perception about Africa, which is partially true, is that AIDS is not at all uncommon in some African countries. According to the statistics published by “State of the World” 40-41), 71% of AIDS cases occur in Africa alone. Fortunately, most African countries have acknowledged the gravity of the situation. One such country is Uganda. The country has embarked on aggressive campaigns to create awareness for this disease. The declining numbers of H.I.V infections bears testimony to the fact that the message has been heeded (Zarembo 44). Uganda’s positive efforts are a reminder that African countries do have an ability to turn their miseries around when given a chance. Now, some African countries may be able to tackle the AIDS scourge using Uganda as an example.

To better understand the perceptions of most Americans about Africa, one has to take note of Joseph Kennedy’s words of wisdom. (Kennedy is a Senior Vice President of a private organization called AFRICARE.) He says that when Americans discuss Africa, they “Speak of the problems and failures of Africa, not the successes” (727). To prove that most African countries are making giant leaps forward in terms of development, one has to listen to what Kennedy said while delivering a speech to the U.S. Senate Committee:

 

In the past few years at least 35 African countries have moved from centrally controlled economies to embrace market driven economies and privatization. At least 20 countries have held democratic multiparty elections. (Some have fallen back but U.S policy markers should realize the road to democracy is not straight and narrow. Those who are on the right path but falter should continue to be nurtured not rebuffed. (728)

 

          Successful African countries such as Botswana are unknown to Americans because of the tranquility that prevails in that country. Botswana, like most African countries, did not inherit any developed infrastructure from colonizers. During his sojourn in Botswana, President Bill Clinton delivered this message:

 

At your independence three decades ago, Botswana was among the poorest countries on earth, with only two miles of paved roads and one public school. Today, you have a vibrant economy, a network of major highways, almost full enrollment in primary schools and the longest average lifespan in Sub-Saharan Africa. (538)

 

As Kennedy asserted in his speech, most African countries are acknowledging that free market economy is the path to take in order to make progress. It has not been easy for it meant a radical change in people’ s attitudes. Most African governments have discarded pre-conceived communistic ideals about how the economy ought to be run. One such country is South Africa, which has implemented a privatization program. According to The Economist, several ex-communist are now doing a good job in the cabinet (“Privatization” 49). South Africa is just one of the African countries, following an example set by Mozambique, in acknowledging the inability of strategies based on scientific Socialism to transform African societies (Clough 25). This is just one of the attempts by most African countries to catch up because they may be acknowledging that they are lagging behind in terms of economic development. South Africa is just one of the latest African countries to embrace the progressive free market economy.

Granted, the frequently reported bad news about corruption and the failing democracy in the Democratic Republic of Congo adds to the prevalent negative perceptions about Africa (Lovgren 44). However, recent events clearly indicate that most African countries are serious about democracy. Nigeria is one classic example. The military government has just formally handed power over to the democratically elected President (Masland 26). In addition, it has now become a trend in Africa for elderly Presidents to step down gracefully and hand power over to young energetic leaders. One is compelled to use South Africa as an example. Earlier this year we saw the 80 year-old former president, Nelson Mandela, stepping down to allow 56 year-old Thabo Mbeki to take charge (Hawthorne and Nelan 40). These new leaders boldly and enthusiastically preach less aid, more trade to the developed countries. The infectious optimism about Africa’s future is manifested in President Mbeki’s often quoted words; “Africa, will prosper.” As for corruption, Nigeria’s newly elected president Olusegun Obasanjo summarizes the mood prevalent in most African countries when he says that “You are caught, you are punished” (Masland 29).

Furthermore, one notable characteristic about most African countries is their ability to forgive former oppressors. In 1934, South Africa’s Prime Minister Malan declared that the logic behind the country’s apartheid policy was “to ensure the safety of the white race and of Christian civilization” (Cervenka 111). Although black South Africans were allowed to vote for the first time in 1994, most people were able to discard the legacy of apartheid. South Africans are urged on by Mandela, who some describe as the “symbol for racial reconciliation” (Hawthorne and Nelan 38). The harmony which South Africans live in is better reflected in the title they use to refer to their country: “Rainbow Nation” (Hawthorne 67). However, just because everything is forgiven does not necessarily mean it is forgotten (67). Unlike Europeans though, they don’t choose to go to war over what happened in the past (67).

 In Africa, “shanty towns” (4) do exist, but do not hide the beauty of Africa. Tourists who travel to different countries in Africa will not fail to appreciate the beauty exhibited by some of the African countries. Uganda has often been described as a hidden Eden and as a paradise on earth because of the extraordinary lush landscapes found in that country (Bailey 48). In addition to that, President Clinton remarked that “visitors to Botswana will never forget the beauty of your environment” during his short visit in that country (538).

For Mackel and many other Americans, their negative perceptions about the African Continent come as a result of the American media portraying Africa in a bad light. In his book Free at last, Michael Clough states that the “American media do not do a good job of covering Africa” and he continues on the same vein saying that the American media “regularly report bad news and seldom report good news”(20). Other notable experts, such as Kennedy, happen to believe that the Americans are giving the African continent a raw deal. He says, “often we have demanded of Africa too many changes in too short a time” (727).

The views expressed by such distinguished characters like Clough and Kennedy may suggest that as far as Africa is concerned, American media (especially TV news networks) specialize in reporting exclusively about the negative events occurring in the continent of Africa. This display of negative images in Africa by the American electronic and print media may permeate the consciousness of most Americans. Influencing most of those naïve souls who tend to believe everything they watch on TV and read in newspapers to cling to the myth that there are no success stories to report about in Africa.  In light of these arguments, one may suggest that the solution lies with the TV news network. If they can adhere to the journalistic principle which declares that there are at least two sides to every story, then it may guide them to bring the positive side of Africa to the American people – a side that most Americans may be ignorant of. In the long run it may enable most Americans to weigh the two sides presented to them about Africa before making their conclusions about the state of the African continent in general.

The whole of Africa should not be dismissed just because other African countries can’t find solutions to their problems- and again it is just problems. Every country in the world has its own domestic problems. Starvation is a problem for some African countries. Well-known experts have decried the same problem of starvation in North Korea (Kirk 26). America has other problems. The Ku Klux Klan is a legal organization in America. That is America’s problem. Africa does not hold that against America. Americans should not hold the problems experienced by some countries in Africa against the whole continent. Maybe then most Americans will realize that it is a mistake to dismiss the whole African continent as a basket case.                    

 

Works Cited

 

Atlas of World Geography. U.S.A: Rand McNally, 1996

Bailey, Robert. “The pearl of Africa shines again.” Newsweek Special Advertising Section, 1 Feb. 1999: 48-49.

Cervenka, Zdenek. The Unfinished Quest for Unity. London: Friedman Publishers Ltd, 1977.

Clinton, William. “Botswana.” Weekly Compilations of Presidential Documents 34 (1997): 538.

Clough, Michael. Free at last? U.S. Policy toward Africa and the end of the cold war. New York: Council On Foreign Relations Press, 1992.

Hawthorne, Peter, and Bruce Nelan. “Struggle in South Africa.” Time 24 May 1999: 38-54.

Kennedy, Joseph. Vital Speeches of the day 63 (1997): 727-728.

Kirk, Donald. “Lambs to the slaughter.” Time 29 March 1999: 26.

“Kosovo.” Newsweek 19 Apr.1998: 14-23.

Lovgren, Stefan. “War without end, amen.” U.S News & World Report 30 Aug. 1999: 44.

Mackel, Lora. “To free Africa.” Arizona Daily Wildcat 7 Oct. 99: 4.

Masland, Tom. “Starting over again.” Newsweek 24 May 1999: 26-29.

McCarthy, Jerry. “Descend into madness.” Time Magazine 7 Dec.1998: 24.

 “Privatization: South Africa.” The Economist Magazine 9 September 1999. 49.

Shawcross, William. “Lost in the wilderness.” Newsweek 19 Apr. 1999: 4.

“The State of The World.” Newsweek 28 Dec. 1998: 40-47.

Zarembo, Alan. “Hope and Despair.” Newsweek 8 December 1997: 40-47.

 

Annotated Bibliography

 

Atlas of World Geography. U.S.A.: Rand McNally: 1996.

This book gives accurate maps and statistics concerning the population of Africa and the number of the countries within the continent of Africa.

Bailey, Robert. Newsweek 1 Feb. 1999: 48-49

The report discusses the progress made by Uganda since the country gained independence. It also talks about the methods used by Uganda in attracting tourists to the country. The article also outlines the current state of tourism in Uganda. The ambitions of the Ugandan government are also mentioned.

Cervenka, Zdenek. The Unfinished Quest for Unity. London : J. Friedman, 1977.

Cervenka’s goal in this book is to help readers understand African affairs. The author outlines the purpose of the Organization of African Unity (O.A.U). One of the largest but least known organization. He states that lack of international comprehension of the affairs occurring in Africa. Cervenka’s book reflects the experiences of people in Africa, Europe and North America.

Clough, Michael. Free at last? U. S. Policy toward Africa and the end of the cold war. New York: Council on Foreign Relations Press, 1992.

Clough provides a comprehensive review of U.S-Africa relations from World War II to the present. Some parts of the book touch on African image as presented by the American media. Clough also states the approaches undertaken by the U.S. in the past and in the present to assist African countries economically. Towards the end of his book, Clough outlines the traditional govemment-to-goverment diplomatic approaches and the past successful strategies that achieved success in combating famine in Ethiopia and ending apartheid in South Africa.

Clinton, William. “Botswana.” Weekly Compilations of Presidential Documents, 34 (1998): 538.

This is a presentation of the speech given by President Clinton on March 29 1998 at a reception in Gaborone, Botswana. The speech deals with the success achieved by Botswana. Economically and democratically.

Hawthorne, Peter, and Bruce Nelan. “Struggle in South Africa.” Time 24 May 1999, 38-54.

This issue was a report on South Aftica. The article talks about the unity between South Africans of all races. The current change occurring in South Africa is stated in this report, as well as the impending retirement of President Nelson Mandela and the smooth ascendancy of Vice President Thabo Mbeki.

Kennedy, Joseph. Vital Speeches of the Day, 63 (1997): 727.

Presents a speech by the AFRICARE Director of International Development, delivered to the U.S. Senate Committee on Agriculture, Nutrition and Forestry. The article deals mainly with the progress of development in Aftica. It also offers some suggestions on how the U. S. can stimulate economic growth and enhance food security in the African Continent.

“Kosovo.”  Newsweek 19 April 1998: 14-23.

This article discusses the mind and motives of the man behind the war in Kosovo, Slobodan Milosevich. The article offers expert analysis of Milosevich’s past, how it shaped him into being a dictator. The article touches on the plight of the refugees in Kosovo and includes an editorial written by Tony Blair, Prime Minister of Britain.

Mackel, Lora J. “To Free Africa.” Arizona Daily Wildcat, 7 Oct. 1999: 4.

This is an opinion article. The article states the author’s views about Africa and touches on what the author claims are the root of the problem. The author gives statistics to strengthen her argument and offers some suggestions on what could be done to help cure the problems bedeviling the African Continent.

Masland, Tom. “Starting over again.” Newsweek 24 May 1999: 26-29.

The article is about the inauguration of the newly elected President of Nigeria, Olusegun Obasanjo. The article discusses Nigeria’s past failed attempts at democracy. Discusses the financial situation of this country. Also, the article outlines the state of corruption in Nigeria and how the newly elected President will deal with it.

McCarthy, Jerry. “Descent into Madness.” Time, 7 Dec. 1998: 24.

This is a brief article that discusses the ethnic and religious hatred prevalent in Indonesia. It also talks about how religious intolerance has led to the loss of many lives of people in Indonesia.

“Privatisation: South Africa.” The Economist Magazine, 9 Sept. 1999: 49.

This article discusses the state of privatization in South Africa as of September 1999. The minister of privatization appointed by former president Nelson Mandela was ineffective in implementing the privatization program. The tactics she employed led to her removal. The article also mentions the success of the newly appointed minister, Jeff Radebe. The article out lines the problems hindering the smooth progress of privatization such as the Trade Unions.

Shawcross, William. “Lost in the Wilderness” Newsweek 19 April 1999: 4-5.

This is a brief opinion article. It talks mainly about the state of the world’s refugees. It also mentions the involvement of the United Nations in helping refugees all over the world.

“The State of The World.” Newsweek. 28 Dec. 1998: 40-47

Summarizes the events that occurred in 1998. Provides data and statistics.

Zarembo, Alan. “Hope and Despair.” Newsweek, 8 Dec. 1997: 40-47.

The article talks mainly about the widening AIDS gap between the rich and poor nations and how it is affecting the developing countries more than the developed countries. The author provides startling statistics to give credibility to the story. The article touches on the current available therapies, the accessibility of these vaccines to the poor people in developing countries, Rwanda’s tactics in creating awareness to reduce the AIDS cases, and on the controversial issue of whether the vaccine that cures AIDS will ever be found.

 

Advice from the Writer

 

The first thing I considered while thinking about my thesis for the Persuasive Essay assignment was whether I should focus on a topic which has considerable significance to my life or whether I should just make up a story with the sole intent of getting a grade and getting it over with. I opted for the former and I realized that when you tackle a topic that somehow affects you, you invest so much thought on it and what’s more, you have a good time writing it.

Once the thesis had gelled in my head, I went about searching for sources that somehow connected to my central argument. The articles didn’t necessarily have to take my stance on the issue. As long as there was a sentence or a word in the article that I felt added weight to my views, I used it.

The most important thing is to use you instructor’s open door policy. I was lucky to have such an instructor and she helped me tremendously with my rough drafts. Pass your rough drafts by your instructor and after incorporating some of her/his comments into your draft, visit the Writing Center with the draft. The tutors at the Writing Center will patiently and objectively go over your draft with you. Although this may involve a lot of hard work, it can also be fun.

 

Comments from the Instructor
Susan Penfield, Instructor

 

Watching Pheto compose this essay was a real joy for me as an instructor. Initially, he was unsure of what to write about.  In class, we discussed the importance of choosing a subject for the argument paper that would really excite some passion.  Pheto found an article in the Daily Wildcat that did just that for him.  As a native of Botswana, Pheto objected to the notion which the article claimed is held by many Americans, that Africa is a “Basket Case.”  The passion to respond to this misleading portrayal of Africa spurred Pheto on.

In addition to choosing a subject lie really cared about, Pheto also began to consider that he could write a real objection--a direct response to the article and send it to the Wildcat.  The notion that his writing had a specific purpose and audience aided in his composition process.  He took the task very seriously and edited and revised several times over.

Pheto also approached this assignment in a number of “good student” ways.  He made frequent visits to my office, made good use of the peer reviews, and diligently studied the elements of the argument papers presented in the Student’s Guide and our text book.  His final product reads smoothly but presents an unmistakably strong argument convincing his readers that Africa is much more than many American perceive it to be.

This essay represents a wonderful contribution in both composition form and content from Pheto, a first semester international student.  As a student in English 107, Pheto was introduced to the American style of academic writing and the classroom conventions of this university for the first time.  The substance of his essay is a testament to his hard work, his interest in writing and to his devotion to his native country.